Let me start off by saying I do not smoke marijuana (I did at one point), nor will I tell you my personal views on the legalization of marijuana. However, I am going to play the Devil’s advocate today by questioning those who oppose the legalization or decriminalization of the emerald treasure.
you never start off by saying "let me start off by saying". your topic sentence isnt a topic. the however, is bad english. "playing devils advocate" implies an established stigma with your position. by calling weed "emerald treasure" you stated your position that you are a lover and even possibly a strong connossieur of weed, you ruined your unbias position you tried to establish. this is off to a bad start.
The U.S. Government has classified Marijuana as a Schedule 1 narcotic (alongside LSD and Heroin). Schedule 1 is the MOST HARMFUL category. Schedule 2, which is less restrictive than schedule 1, includes drugs like cocaine, amphetamine, and morphine. According to that rationale, Marijuana is a gateway to drugs that are considered “less dangerous”. This, my friends, makes absolutely no sense.
facts are not topic sentences. there is no citation here for any of these facts. "that rationale" is bad english. whyd you capitalize marijuana? "This, my friends" is bad english. "makes absolutely no sense" is bad english, strongly biased, no facts to back it up.
First of all, Alexandra Datig (founder of “Nip It In The Bud”
says “America is an extremely glamorous society. The people here, even on the most humble level, are intelligent, sophisticated, and proud of who they are.” She said this after comparing the United States to places in Europe, namely Portugal, who she says is not a super power and that is why decriminalization works for them. Really? We have children committing serious offenses, people murdering each other daily, and “glamorous” stars and other rich people using drugs like cocaine, methamphetamine, crack, heroin, and prescription pills. In fact, out of all the stars who have died prematurely, none of them have died from marijuana use.
'first of all' is bad english and isnt a topic sentence. a topic sentence is the thesis for your paragraph, it is not a fact or a quote. she said this is bad english. no citation for the quotes. no citation for your claims of children committing serious offenses, murder daily etc. "in fact" with no citation to prove your fact.
Ok, back to the statement. “America is an extremely glamorous society.” The way people paint this country and the way it really is are conflicting. I love the United States, but let’s be serious for a minute. When people murder, lie, cheat, steal, sell and use the nastiest of drugs, and hurt others to get ahead in their own lives, I would say the “glamorous”, “intelligent”, and “sophisticated” statements can be tossed right out the window. Even rich people hurt others to increase their wealth, which is wrong in many, many ways. So how glamorous are we? How intelligent are we for admiring people who have serious problems? Better yet, why can’t we just accept America for what it is? A country with regular people who make mistakes regularly. We are no better than anybody else on this planet. That is something for all of you to think about.
ok, back to the statement? wtf was that? that is horrible english, and implies that you lost your train of thought and had to get back to the paper. it has become obvious you love marijuana and was blitzed out of your mind when writing this paper, you couldnt even keep track of your own paper, LMAO. also, it is not a topic sentence. "lets be serious for a minute" is horrible english. you have no citations to back up anything you say, you ask questions taht are not questions but opinions, you carry on with waht should ahve been finished in the previous paragraph, you ask the reader to do all of the thinking for you.
What is so bad about the legalization or decriminalization of marijuana? Some say it is a gateway drug and more people will smoke if it is legal. Really? I believe the use of narcotics in Portugal decreased when they were decriminalized. People who do not smoke weed will not pick up the habit just because it is legal, much like people who do not drink. When something is illegal, many people are more likely to go out and do it. Remember when you were a kid and your parents told you not to do something, but you did it anyway because you wanted to test the limits? Same rules apply here, only on a much more serious scale. When things are legal, they lose their appeal. Alcohol was prohibited and the United States gave birth to organized crime. Alcohol was legalized and crimes related to bootlegging went away. So is it safe to say that legalizing marijuana would cut crime and save money and prison space for true criminals? You decide.
asking questions. "some say" without a citation is the worst kind of offense in a paper.
"Really?" is awful english. stating opinions without fact. slippery slope argument, flawed logic, theres at least 3 common logical fallacies here. asking reader too much. no citations. leading a sentence with 'so', broken sentences
Others say the government is concerned about health risks and costs associated with smoking marijuana. Really? Cigarettes contain 4,000 chemicals (43 of which are carcinogenic), and 400 other toxins. Nicotine, tar, carbon monoxide, formaldehyde, ammonia, hydrogen cyanide, arsenic, and DDT are among those chemicals. Things we are told NOT to put into our bodies, but it is okay for tobacco companies to put them in their products and hook everybody who lights up. Cigarettes are the most addictive products in the world, even more addictive than heroin….but they are legal. They kill people every single day but the government is not saying anything about that. Is it because the government receives so much tax revenue from tobacco sales? I think it is safe to say YES!
others say with no citation is one of the worst offenses in a serious paper. bad english. not starting sentences properly, stating facts with no citations. opinion without fact. "I think" is terrible flaw in a serious paper, is opinion, and also you said that you would not state your opinion. you flat out never use "...." in a paper, "..." is ellipses, used for quoting, it does not indicate a pause.
Alcohol. Where do I start with this? Some people say we are too lenient with alcohol, but we have some of the most strict alcohol laws in the world. Again, the reason people fall in love with this substance is because we cannot consume it until we are 21 years old. Many cultures around the globe introduce alcohol to children and they are allowed to drink with their meals. Allowing this removes the “taboo” label from the product, making it not such a big deal. According to MSNBC, the United States sees about 75,000 alcohol related deaths per year, making it the third leading cause of preventable death behind cigarette smoking and poor diet/exercise habits. Regardless of those statistics, any one of us can go grab a case of beer, a pack of cigarettes, and a Big Mac meal on any given night. Again, is the government really concerned about the health risks associated with marijuana use? No.
"some people say" ok it has become clear you're just making it up at this point. Alcohol. Is not sentence. "Where do I start with this?" dude, put down the bong and get it together, ive wasted my time this long, goddamn. no citations. "No." is not a sentence. a buncha other shit im running out of patience to even bring up
I have consumed marijuana in my life and I couldn’t care less what anybody thinks about that. I’ve never overdosed, I’ve never tried other illegal narcotics, and I never hurt anybody to get weed. The worst thing that ever happened to me was the munchies and a case of the naps. I’m intelligent, I’m responsible, and I’m a nonviolent citizen with no criminal record. While I have not touched weed for years, I know how it works and I would not go so far as to say it is bad for the country (especially knowing what cigarettes and alcohol, which are legal, do to us every day). In fact, if people were allowed to smoke weed freely, we might actually be a more laid back country.
so you admit youre a drug user and you do not care about the law. genius. in a paper about legalizing something. why would the reader care what you had to say after reading that sentence? you just admitted you dont care if it is illegal or not, you will do it anyway, which only gives power to the other side which has commonly stated legalizing marijuana will only help people who want to casually smoke it (citation needed). this is flawed logic all throughout. this whole portion is conversational and nothing but opinion and has no business in a serious paper, also you are omitting the other side of the argument and stating your opinion as fact with no citation to credit any source or back up these 'facts'
Let’s be real here. The United States is far from perfect, and so are the people who live here. We can smoke, drink, and take prescription pills. All of these things can cause health issues and addiction, but they are readily available to whoever wants them. On the other hand, a natural substance like Marijuana is illegal. The crop makes more money than legal crops, can boost tax revenue, stimulate the economy (food, jobs), and does not present serious health risks like those associated with the legal, more deadly substances our government allows us to consume freely. Remember, decriminalizing or legalizing a substance is not going to create users, it will only allow users to use freely. Those who do not use, will not start just because they can.
I am only playing the Devil’s advocate. I am not here saying we should or should not legalize something, I’m just saying we should open our minds and take a look at what is legal, what is not, and what products are really hazardous to our health and well-being.
So what do you think?
Lets be real here? what the hell does taht mean? have you been being fake the whole entire time ive been reading? horrible language, not a sentence. all opinion, no credible citations
i give up man
look breh, i hate to be a super dick head but you're never going to graduate high school unless you start taking the english language and your writing seriously. you sound like you're in about 6th-7th grade, theres some good trade schools out there... just keep your head up and you might be able to graduate, i dunno. also people under 18 shouldnt be in the detox. you posted thsi there too
