What you got here I'm not feeling at all. I was lost under two minutes at what the song was about. It didn't grab my attention. It just seemed to come in rambling. I will give it another listen at another time to be fair, but I do appreciate the work put into it. I can hear that. Which opens up a can of worms to where artist often expect for people to appreciate the hard work behind a record. The reality is, the work behind it is never really appreciated by the majority. If the record sucks, it sucks.
Much like when you purchase something, take it home & it doesn't work. You don't give a shit if the person who built it was over worked, got employee of the month, had perfect attendence at work or his / her family member died. Bottom line, your product doesn't work and you're not happy.
Perhaps there is a market for this somewhere, but rap has gone back to the basics IMO. Any real artist is not looking for radio hits. It's gone back to lyrics / punchlines etc.
The problem with so called music today is whatever. They rhyme for the sake of rhyming, but there is no real foundation / emotion behind it. One of two things, either artist today are not talented, haven't really lived life or the pioneers were much better at telling stories.