Make sure it's mixed down and mastered right, usually some part of the audio is fucked up on his albums....shit isn't always clear and crisp, etc...(I'm not doggin' Lynch, cause he is sick...)
Post up a tight beat with you rappin' over it....you should never post something that YOU aren't proud of....Cause if you're sayin' it's not that tight, do you expect ANYONE else to think that it's tight?
BTW, you're first line should have been..."I could sell a ketchup popsicle to a lady in white gloves on a 95 degree summer day." That would have sounded better...