A 16 I laid down
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Your shit is tight IMO but i'm just sayen : this is what toodles means
1. toodles
noun. an extremely queer way of seeing someone off. often used by such "characters" as george michaels, elton john, and James Donahue.
James: "Toodles, i'm going to shower while listening to "The Best Gf WHAM!" and "Mandy Moore's Greatest Hits!"
1. toodles
noun. an extremely queer way of seeing someone off. often used by such "characters" as george michaels, elton john, and James Donahue.
James: "Toodles, i'm going to shower while listening to "The Best Gf WHAM!" and "Mandy Moore's Greatest Hits!"
yeah, toodles was meant to be funny.....people say toodles when they are leaving....and my comparison to it was I'm drinking and smoking till I'm "gone" meaning over, wasted, or any other slang that equates to being extremely intoxicated.
blowin weed by the O's and yes I got oodles
I get it like the song bout the soup chicken noodle
henny on the side, piece sign, bitch, toodles
I'm gone......
talking about weed and how much I get it (like the song chicken noodle soup where they repeat "lets get it" 2384732987 times).....fuck a soda on the side I'd rather have hennessy, and getting intoxicated, leaving sobriety being gone
lol @ me explaining toodles tho.....it was just some shit that rhymed anyways
I think I'mma write something tonite for the fuck of it
blowin weed by the O's and yes I got oodles
I get it like the song bout the soup chicken noodle
henny on the side, piece sign, bitch, toodles
I'm gone......
talking about weed and how much I get it (like the song chicken noodle soup where they repeat "lets get it" 2384732987 times).....fuck a soda on the side I'd rather have hennessy, and getting intoxicated, leaving sobriety being gone
lol @ me explaining toodles tho.....it was just some shit that rhymed anyways
I think I'mma write something tonite for the fuck of it
As far as the written material, it could use work. The rhyme scheme is too simple and it's pretty obvious you didn't put much effort into it. I don't mind the pronunciation of words altered slightly to force a rhyme, but the "fo-ol" line that 'rhymed' with "Google" was too much for me. The donut line didn't make sense, because there is no wheel traction to lose during a donut because the whole donut process consists of a lack of traction - therefor you cannot do a donut "until there's no more wheel traction." But that's a matter of detail..
As far as the audio goes.. The beat is ill. But I'm not feelin the way you speak, that common 'Bay Area slang' way of speaking.. It reminds me of a ditzy blonde (no hate). I believe it was you that said you didn't like my voice, well, we'll just say the feeling is mutual. The flow itself was on beat for the most part, but did trail off on several lines.
Overall it's better than a lot of cats who try to rap I'll say that..
As far as the audio goes.. The beat is ill. But I'm not feelin the way you speak, that common 'Bay Area slang' way of speaking.. It reminds me of a ditzy blonde (no hate). I believe it was you that said you didn't like my voice, well, we'll just say the feeling is mutual. The flow itself was on beat for the most part, but did trail off on several lines.
Overall it's better than a lot of cats who try to rap I'll say that..
^good lookin
good shit, my shit ain't brain surgery....I ain't trying to write a PHD thesis paper or anything....I can't really change that common "bay area slang" cuz that's just how I speak.....lol @ hella analyzing the donut line tho, it wasn't even a good punchline to begin with...and I don't even like my own voice either, I think I mentioned that
No doubt. Just dropping some friendly criticism.
It's not the slang that I don't like (although I don't use it and have absolutely no desire to do so), it's the way everyone speaks when they use it. That whole hyphy way of acting, it irritates the fuck out of me. It's like they're talking to a little baby or something, or they sound like some airhead blondes. But that's just me, do what you do homie.
Yeah.. But just so you know, my homeboy is the one that pointed that out before I could even say anything. I caught it but he's the one that brought it up. He got all wriled up LOL.
Yeah I just figured I'd let you know that I don't like it either. Just a part of the review homie..
It's not the slang that I don't like (although I don't use it and have absolutely no desire to do so), it's the way everyone speaks when they use it. That whole hyphy way of acting, it irritates the fuck out of me. It's like they're talking to a little baby or something, or they sound like some airhead blondes. But that's just me, do what you do homie.
Yeah.. But just so you know, my homeboy is the one that pointed that out before I could even say anything. I caught it but he's the one that brought it up. He got all wriled up LOL.
Yeah I just figured I'd let you know that I don't like it either. Just a part of the review homie..
