The mixing fucked up this song... The first dude used the "generic" demon over-dubs, that have been used way too much in horrorcore, other than that it's just the typical "rip-your guts" type of rhyme, not bad though. It serves it purpose.
Chorus is alright, but I don't like the over-dubs... I think they fuck it up for me...
Second dude is straight, but sounds a little too chill for a song like this, or his lyrics... It might be because he's reading them, or nervous... I dig this verse the most, lyrically...
Third cat lyrics are pretty stand, nothing special, but he brings more intensity... His over-dubs are really fucked up and threw his verse off, especially towards the end...
I think the song could be alright if mixed better, and maybe re-recorded... I don't think it's going to be a masterpiece, but this is the horrorcore genre, you're not going to find too much of that here...