Untitled Song I'm working on

[ovarbmu]

my rebellious rap lyrics stood the test of time/
what i busted from the heart was the best of mine/
best in line flexed my rhyme then rested fine/
next day record labels wanna get me signed/
blowin guys away like jennifer lopez/
niggas suckin dick on the streets like they some coke heads/
no that, no cat with ho raps gon' blow fast/
long as im here they pedal to themetal with no gas/
talkin bout thug life, thug raps and thugs clothes/
he the type that love life, dug mats and drug hope/

that's all i got so far.
what yall think straight up?

(i'm gonna post a freestyle tommorrow, look out for that.)

 

[BETO916]

pretty good youngsta...my suggestion is to write your raps on word first, then cut & paste them shits up here...it's just frustrating trying to read lyrics & figure out what the words are to begin with. (not just you) keep doin' your thang mane.

peace.

(i'm gonna post a freestyle tommorrow, look out for that.)

is it going to be a freestyle, or are you going to write something & post it tomorrow?

 

[ovarbmu]

i'm gonna find a beat and freestyle to it tommorrow(with just speakers, a bootleg mic and sound recorder) and then post it

*edit*

pretty good youngsta...my suggestion is to write your raps on word first, then cut & paste them shits up here...it's just frustrating trying to read lyrics & figure out what the words are to begin with. (not just you) keep doin' your thang mane.

peace.

kinda explain what you mean so i know what your talkin about. i'm kinda confused by the wording

 

[reppin_the_509]

he meens, type it out in microsoft word first


anyways, good shit, no really present topic though, if im missin sumthin let me know, but from what i can see, there is no topic

 

[JLMACN]

blowin guys away like jennifer lopez/

i would change this line...

i didnt know how to take it...really..

sounded..a little...G-A-Y

5000

 

[ovarbmu]

i could never find the way to word that line right

also everytime i sit down and tr to write about a topic i end up straying away and rapping about random shit

 

[JLMACN]

blowin guys away but i aint Jen Lopez/

something like that...

5000

 

[ovarbmu]

thanks

 

[ovarbmu]

damn man i'm trying to post these freestyles i did but all the upload services are shitty. yousendit, megaupload, rapidshare, turbo upload, those 4 are un dependable and suck dick!