Theme Of Love

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All Out HOGG

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First thing i wanna say is...This piece...Iv'e put alot of time into it...I want the story told right...Ive re-written it & re-written it...Over again & again...Im still no-where near happy with it...Anyway its a love story between a crow & a raven...Why? .............A Raven's souless...It's only purpose in life is believed to find a soul...A Crow carries the souls of the dead...The raven falls in love with the crow only to find deception...It can't achieve a soul becuase the soul the crow carries [& is promised to the raven through love with the crow] Is that of the dead...Its no longer mortal...It only brings the raven eternal pain...Failing in its only task...A lesson wich the raven learns that the source of love is pain...The raven then leaves the crow...It breaks the crows heart & sentences it to 'Forever Sorrow"...Its said that the rain in deserted places covered in shadow is tears of the Raven...Wheeping in lonelyness...The crow however is also punished by god for its deception until the end of time...To scavage & be a symbol of dead [A deception to the bible]...Its said that God forgives the crow once the world ends...Allowing it to be the first creature to die...& rest within the arms of heaven...

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Patiantly waiting...Without you its like im sufficateing...Lett me die & fly amongst the dead...Embrace ya lips & offer a chest to rest ya head...I'd walk across water to seaze ya heart...Cease to breath when ya pressense took part...Just a hollow hole left inda the back of my mind...A touch so cold it delivers shivers down ya spine...I just want what is mine...Sumthin worth searchin across the seas of time...Dia Del Muertos...Worship that without pathos? ...Just the essence [TAKE A BREATH & INHALE IT] Wondering what love feel like? ...Knock me off my feet spread my wings & hold me right? ...Thas how its suppost to be, But ya realy just not know'n me...How can it be when LOVE doesnt exsist in ETERNITY?* ...See i gave up hope...Ive found passion ina rope...[USELESS] Don't work, It just burns...A secret exsposed & the truth is learned...

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Viva siempre...Shed a tear...
El eterno AMOR entre vida y un alma...

Fucked up...I wish you was here...
But thas the theme of love...

Viva siempre...Shed a tear...
El eterno AMOR entre vida y un alma...

Fucked up...I wish you was here...
Im alone...But thas the theme of love...

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The deepest of wounds won't ever bleed...Ya all i need, Everything i ever want'd to achieve...Just to be with you...Heartbroken becuase i needed you...Im alone...Stuck in the stiches ya sown...Embrace the hate...Lett em all laugh while the tears run down my face...[DEAR LORD] [LETT ME FALL BACKWORDS INTO THE SKY]...Not afraid to die but scared to go on without the glimmer in ya eyes...I'll Rest forever in the deception of compassion...Comprimise the lies into sensable rassion...Im determanded to find the answers & put everything to an end...Pray to God & can't seem to understand why he don't comprehand...He just leaves me in the cold the same way you did...[Now im here] Late night kissing the stars just remembering what you did...

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Viva siempre...Shed a tear...
El eterno AMOR entre vida y un alma...

Fucked up & I wish you was here...
But thas the theme of love...

Viva siempre...Shed a tear...
El eterno AMOR entre vida y un alma...

Fucked up...I wish you was here...
Im alone...But thas the theme of love...

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I LOVE YOU..........[No answer back]...I LOVE YOU...[Why won't ya answer back?]...Tha rains cold & i don't gotta jacket...I Love you...But it took me losen my soul for ya to see that...



HHHmmm...Post ya thoughts & suggestions...This ain't my style lyricaly...But...It was a new expirement that ima attempt & attempt to reformat untill i gett right..so ya know...whatever thou...any feedback is appriciated...

*SIDENOTE*

'How can it be when LOVE doesnt exsist in ETERNITY?*"

If ya don't undestand...It means that you can't spell LOVE with ETERNITY...So it means that they weren't suppost to go together...In this sense atleast
 
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Knucklez

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its coo.. strange for a flow.. but poetry runs through it.. and theres a shit load of hiden meaning and personal references in it.. very interesting piece
 
MR. TYPCEE

MR. TYPCEE

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good shit, good shit...for a poem...coo, but you got tha chorus n shit im guessin you wanna flow it?...i say make it a ~*LiL*~ more complex...but i dont know ya delivery style....az far az you expressin...damn bruh...i read it like four timez...you can almost hear tha pain when you read it...like i said before...very impressive...$idewayz

~*MR. TYPCEE*~
 
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gots to give you respect.........i dont think i could ever do some shit live that.............you should enter the best poet in the world............
 
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All Out HOGG

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Thanks for the compliments...

Is there any suggestions on ways to improve it?
 
Dvious

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That was tight Smurf

if you don't mind I'm gonna post some similar
shit I wrote...here it is

It takes a man to admit when he's wrong and also to say that he's sorry
So I apologize for any pain I may have caused but the wounds you inflicted when you left still scar me
As I looked into your eyes for the last time..it was like starin death in the face
You were my angel of death,takin my soul,to lead me to my final restin place
Now my dreams are shattered,my hopes are crushed,the greatest love I've ever known is gone
Somebody please wake me up from this nightmare that I'm havin
and explain to me what's goin on
Did you really think I would forget that you,just ripped in two
My mind,my heart,my soul,now I'm simply driftin through
Life as Half a Man,still bleedin,now I'm standin at the crossroads
Wonderin wich path to take and wonderin where I'd be if I had not chose
To fall in love with my best friend and leave everything we had alone
But I followed my heart there's no turnin back now,everything is cast in stone
I can no longer sit back and watch,and let you play the puppet master
I gotta cut the strings and turn the page so I can finally start another chapter
So I can hear anothers laughter,even though it's gonna be hard to love with only half a heart
The other half still in pieces,but I have no choice,this is where I'm gonna have to start
I wish things coulda been different baby and we coulda walked this crooked path together
What's done is done,we hit the end of the road,I still hurt but I move through the bad weather
Maybe in the after life,we'll meet again and roam the heavens walkin hand in hand
But until that time I'll be pickin up the peices roamin through hell as only Half a Man
 
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  • 'Ayannami"

Nothin is wrong so sumthin gotta be wrong…Thas when I approached my soul with a song…Playin my piano slowly in the dark…Should it shed tears from my heart…I can only ask for tangiable things…But if I control boundries of life can I determine what tanigable means? Ina nother world where espers breath…Through the dim shadows i rake the leaves…Holy matter for the reason…Im lost…Lost to it all without suceedeing…Do the demons speak…Or is it just the voices in my head talking to me…Have you ever thought about dieing ina sense your already dead…What it would be to look down an see yourself rise from the dead…I doubt the faces on the wall are realy there…Just kiss them…Kiss them…Kiss them…Welcome yourself into my dispair

One world…One wound….A sad note the lil blue boy sung…A deadly note continued to play as the lil blue boy hung…

What a place we live in…Going through all the shit we did…
Its no wonder we turned out the way we did…

Now disappear…Into darkness…Into sleep…I prey the lord my soul to keep…

Take my hand ill walk with you…Just a boy crying inside because I don’t wanna be without you…My mellodies are just words…Those that could never be heard…Lett the tides carry me out to see…If I drown would you remember me…Maybe not…Just like everything else even life is forgot…Is it so wrong to enjoy pain…I smile for those trapped in pergatory and eternal abyss where there pressense will always remain…Somethings are lost…But if there is no suffering then it realy wasn’t worth the cost…The eternal whisperings of misanthropy…I heard it all cuase Cheriour spoke to me…

One world…One wound….A sad note the lil blue boy sung…A deadly note continued to play as the lil blue boy hung…

What a place we live in…Going through all the shit we did…
Its no wonder we turned out the way we did…

Now disappear…Into darkness…Into sleep…I prey the lord my soul to keep…

Shemhamphorae bared upon the presence of 72 angels…13 souls & 72 angels…I lost my way…Please find me amongst the stray…Do I wish to die…Not sure if im still alive…Fallen from the sky beyond lifes hold…Me, The lil blue boy who played heavens deadly note….

One world…One wound….A sad note the lil blue boy sung…A deadly note continued to play as the lil blue boy hung…

What a place we live in…Going through all the shit we did…
Its no wonder we turned out the way we did…

Now disappear…Into darkness…Into sleep…I prey the lord my soul to keep…

One world…One wound….A sad note the lil blue boy sung…A deadly note continued to play as the lil blue boy hung…

  • A lil background info…
  • Shemhamphorae is heaven...God divided his name amongst 72 chosen angels...Each bareing one of the 13 charachters in it...The rest of the angels bareing the name where made into musical notes...Cheriour the 'Terrible" angel was the force preventing this from ever happening...If the song was ever played it would invoke God and cleanse heaven of evil...But sinse peace cannot be held even when handed down from God we are all doomed to the current dwellings of earth...Im not sure how you would take it but the song is about a song...The song made from God's name...





 
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