''That 8 Liner''

[''5 Fifty 9'']

its that mexican thats open minded//
pistol whip ya ass so fast it'll leave ya blinded//
blaze up the weed and i'm ready 2 get key'd//
puff,puff,puff till it's down till tha seed//
i'm like tony montana//
i rip them stanza's//
and i'm out on my short ass verse//
fuck wit this eNe and i'll wave 2 ya when ya in ya hearst//


I tried..i'm still learning some new shit but i just did this..don't hate on me that much homies

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[Anghellic831]

im still learnin too homie

 

[carlos]

keep writin/typin u can do better..with the freestyle rap....do u even understand punchlines? metaphors, 16 bars, end rhymes??...ya vocabulary needs to be worked more....but keep typing and writing freestyle rap shit and you'll do better...if ur real smart and u write everyday then you'll be hella tight in bout 2 3 monthes but if not den it's gon take time...

 

[''5 Fifty 9'']

^^ thanx 4 da tips homie!..i know alot of people be sayin work at it and expand ya vocab..but thanx again ill take your advise..


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[40ozThugsta]

that verse is pretty tight....
i just spit those lyrics.. and they sounded good....

yeah lyrics.. are imporatant...
but it's also about how you spit them...
if you spit your words with emotion.. and power....
and have a sicc delivery.... and also always let it come straight from tha heart....
it will sound tight....

I like that part about Tony Montana and rippin tha Stanza...
that was tight... hahaha good shit...

im not a battle rapper.... i just say what i feel....

but yeah good shit man.. i was feelin tha verse.....
you record audio also???? u should record audio later

keep doing ur thang man... peace... !

-Mista Murda

 

[''5 Fifty 9'']

^^ thanx homie nah' i never recored audio..i do record some shit on tapes though wit my homies to see if ours rap are good and shit..you a good ass lyricist 2 homie i like ya 187 they die!..

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