still a lil new to writing gimme feedback if you wanna

[dmpstr105]

for real
i corner illiterates, who litigate, dummy dimwitted dickriding sentiment, to set it straight, i flow fantastically off the crate, i reckognize gumshoe analogies that hop off the mind and let loose the bait, induce the chase, and illuminate loony goonses fate, your toons too late, now i acknowledge certain crooked-wit visions, that enlist dreary doom draggers to inspire mens decisions, again lets listen, to freight train precussions, that make beggers flip 180 and straight take the muffins

just a quick flow that came to me on the trip home from work tell me what you think or if i should just give up now im not too much really into my spits people say im alright just gimme some words on what yall think thanks

 

[dmpstr105]

alright ive gotten like 13 views and no one can even tell me i suck and to quit while i still have my dignity well shit someone gimme some feedback dammit

 

[antiochsamiam]

its okay mayne, stay with your shit no matter what people think or say, cuz if you like it thats all that realy matters for now, practice makes perfect kid, what part of co you from?

 

[dmpstr105]

im from littleton man and thanks ill stick with it see where it goes cant go now where but up in skill right

 

[antiochsamiam]

damn straight, me and some boys comin down to denver here next week, is it fun out there?, skill takes time, it may get frustraiting and seem hopeless to do your shit man, but hey if you think it sounds good, thats all that realy matters, i liked it! keep it up mayne