some new lyrics.....

[CHRISHOGGALYPSE]

any of the moderators feel free to delete this....but i want to know if homeboys can feel lryics like this because i am contemplating rappin for real....so any feedback is appreciated. It's a lil more lyrical than i normally get, but let me kno....

you can't diminish me,
I'm explicit and consistent with my exhibitions of chivalry,
and I’m physically, orchestrated like I’m a symphony,
give your ears an experience like it's a Christians epiphany,
I persistently, kill all the limits that they list for me,
and I'm slipping free from all the death threats that they wish for me,
the opposition seems, like they’re gonna forever be slithering,
snakes rats and pigs won’t allow me to enjoy the simple things,
it’s sickening, they won’t rest til my neck is in the guillotine,
but I’m on bended knees listening,
to the Lord and while he’s forgiving me,
I can’t believe he fulfills my needs,
when I’m not contributing to his ministry,
maybe it’s the homeboys fault for this skills they have instilled in me,
but it’s not their fault, all they did was keep it real with me////

 

[Kidd North]

nice shyt homie

 

[CHRISHOGGALYPSE]

thanks

 

[Rusto]

you wont make it unless you get rid of the big words, theres a lot of stupid people out there that wont understand what the fuck your talking about, and cut down on some of the religious stuff. you dont want to be labeled as "christian hip hop" that would be the end of your career before it begins. And maybe make the story a lil more clear, too vague.

 

[CHRISHOGGALYPSE]

It's a lil more lyrical than i normally get

thanks for the feedback and honesty. but this is plenty more lyrical than i get. there are often metaphors in my lyrics, so you have to think about it more than once to get it sometimes, but to me it's much better that way. I'm not gonna stop saying shit to make people think, just because they are too lazy or they don't feel like thinkin you dig? I put extra thought in there, to make the listener, or reader in this case, think too. N the religious stuff will stay, likely less than in this song, but something that is a big of a part in my life as God is, I can't help but talk about it. Just like people who get faded all the time, talk about that shit. It's difficult to incorporate God in there, and keep it street. This song ain't all that street, but I think i've done a pretty good job on other stuff I've written having a medium in there. But anyways, i'll stop runnin my mouth lol, thanks again for the feedback, stay up fool

 

[RIX]

i think tha people wanna listen more than they wanna think, there are too many big words, i tried doin that shit, n u get tongue tied, i think u shud say it out loud, n then see if u can even keep up wit tha beat of what u are rappin it too, shit is hard man, tha game is hard to get into, i aint discouragin, cuz only u know yo abilities, but there is alot to think about, u gotta have a real story to tell fo usually more than 10 songs... n people gotta feel yo shit... 1

 

[CHRISHOGGALYPSE]

not a problem on both counts homie! i do say all my shit out loud, because yes, it does make a huge difference. I don't think people feelin my lyrics would be a problem, this song isn't my style, but i wanted to hear how people felt about it. stay up

 

[RIX]

i feel