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Oct 26, 2002
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(put 2 a deeper era beat sounds dope) (i also have a weird style tho)

....droping rhymes like bomb on residentail areas/
making faggots who walk in my town dead cause there scaring ya//
jus like elvis presley im tha king never to return/
cause im travling tha country spittin my rhymes seeing if any1 can learn//
from my ill mannered flows...thats bust domes...making muthaphuckas cry/
cause ur a slut gotta go...short like a gnome...2 caps in ur dome now ur in tha sky//
making wishses on tha stars and hoping to god u can come back to this wasteland earth/
to heard my lyrical master peices i blend like a witch doctor making a voodoo curse//
so tell me what chu gonna do when i roll on ur town/
are u gonna go along with tha hatas and bump a played out sound//
or are you gonna be a rebel and be savage like me a true DVG/
making a living off tha dope game rhyming for fun being all you can be//
jus like tha armE marines and nav-E/
starit american heros fighting tha fight of our lives killing bitches with ease//
making bin laden and his crew pray for their life begging on their knees//

wat u think jus sum top of tha head shit sounds good while i was doing it.. late
 
May 21, 2002
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its aight but u could use more rhyme within rhymes and try to use only one subject to relate to in ur metaphors. for example: "jus like the armE marines and nav-E" u shoulda just said armE.keep at it. stay up dogg.peece.