i need sum feedback on this song, not sure if its worth studio time, help me out chall::
Verse 1:
The place was the Golden State in the year 1988/ young couple learned they gotta baby on the way/ father questioning, should he go or should he stay/ but he grew up without a father in his life/ he turned out fine, but still asks her to be his wife/ tells her he loves her, and will always be by her side/ scared n confused, determined 2 support her any way that he can/ yung n restless, determined 2 step up n be a man/ 9 months later, he has his first child/ but things at home, they getting kinda wild/ arguing, fighting, and screaming/ sed sum things, but really didn’t mean ‘em/ counting the dayz since he last seen ‘em/ in the morning he cries, at night he starts dreamin’/ life goes on, he grows strong, tryin not 2 do no wrong/ he receives a call in from the coroner/ sez his wife’s fallen, shot by a foreigner/ he heard this and his heart sunk/ not a day goes by where he’s not drunk/ he lost his job, his child, and his wife/ so he decides that 2nyte, he gunna take his life/
Chorus:
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
Verse 2:
4 yrs. Later, 1992/ yung man stressed out, tired of school/ only 14, already caught up n the wrong crew, red vs. blue/ he wants out, but don’t kno wut 2 do/ suicidal, but to scared to shoot/ his brother was his only support/ but got caught up, sent 2 court/ just last week, together they smoked a dubee/ today, he visiting him in juvi/ it feels so unreal, like a scene from a movie/ depressed n angry, feels he’s cursed/ the only way out, is off this earth/ locked down in an eternal prison/ suicidal thoughts n his knot, nobody listens/ 4 dayz later, child gone missin’/ reports of a body-car, head on collision/ brother wishin’ they would’ve made better decisions/ locked up in prison, his soul also gone missin’
Chorus:
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
Verse 3:
present day, 2k5/ jussa yungin’, wishes he wasn’t alive/ not really, just hates his home life/ at age 16, new talent revealed/ but insecurity keeps it sealed/ a new skill of extemporizing/ temperature rising, until it breaks out/ serves these niggaz up like it’s a take out/ made it 2 the top, he number one/ but then got popped, for some shit he done/ it sounds dumb, but it’s the truth/ lost his life in his prime youth/ wuts the use, of preaching when nobody can hear/ if only folks would stop and listen/ wouldn’t be so crowded n prison/ my kin wouldn’t have gone missin’, they’d still be here with me/ take a second to breathe, open yur eyez to see/ yur tru potential, the greatness you can be/
Chorus:
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
contact info:
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Verse 1:
The place was the Golden State in the year 1988/ young couple learned they gotta baby on the way/ father questioning, should he go or should he stay/ but he grew up without a father in his life/ he turned out fine, but still asks her to be his wife/ tells her he loves her, and will always be by her side/ scared n confused, determined 2 support her any way that he can/ yung n restless, determined 2 step up n be a man/ 9 months later, he has his first child/ but things at home, they getting kinda wild/ arguing, fighting, and screaming/ sed sum things, but really didn’t mean ‘em/ counting the dayz since he last seen ‘em/ in the morning he cries, at night he starts dreamin’/ life goes on, he grows strong, tryin not 2 do no wrong/ he receives a call in from the coroner/ sez his wife’s fallen, shot by a foreigner/ he heard this and his heart sunk/ not a day goes by where he’s not drunk/ he lost his job, his child, and his wife/ so he decides that 2nyte, he gunna take his life/
Chorus:
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
Verse 2:
4 yrs. Later, 1992/ yung man stressed out, tired of school/ only 14, already caught up n the wrong crew, red vs. blue/ he wants out, but don’t kno wut 2 do/ suicidal, but to scared to shoot/ his brother was his only support/ but got caught up, sent 2 court/ just last week, together they smoked a dubee/ today, he visiting him in juvi/ it feels so unreal, like a scene from a movie/ depressed n angry, feels he’s cursed/ the only way out, is off this earth/ locked down in an eternal prison/ suicidal thoughts n his knot, nobody listens/ 4 dayz later, child gone missin’/ reports of a body-car, head on collision/ brother wishin’ they would’ve made better decisions/ locked up in prison, his soul also gone missin’
Chorus:
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
Verse 3:
present day, 2k5/ jussa yungin’, wishes he wasn’t alive/ not really, just hates his home life/ at age 16, new talent revealed/ but insecurity keeps it sealed/ a new skill of extemporizing/ temperature rising, until it breaks out/ serves these niggaz up like it’s a take out/ made it 2 the top, he number one/ but then got popped, for some shit he done/ it sounds dumb, but it’s the truth/ lost his life in his prime youth/ wuts the use, of preaching when nobody can hear/ if only folks would stop and listen/ wouldn’t be so crowded n prison/ my kin wouldn’t have gone missin’, they’d still be here with me/ take a second to breathe, open yur eyez to see/ yur tru potential, the greatness you can be/
Chorus:
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
This is life/mite not be rite/but you got 2 deal with it/its come to this/memories not missed/cause they are relived/what's gonna happen/a new thing everyday/through good and bad/what can I say
contact info:
[email protected]