Lil' rhyme I wrote. Hopin 2 get some feedback

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Jun 22, 2002
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Mainly from 151, Cyco and them but all feedback (negative or positive) is much appreciated.
I felt like rhymin with sound E's at the endin, dunno why. Heard it's repitive cuz of that but was intentional:

My battle to eradicate fake MC's
is like a linguist reciting his ABC's
I bring so much heat, have the room up a couple degrees
More so than heavy-spitting artillery infantries
At the same time, with the same rhyme, im so cold, makin yo ass freeze
Why u even tryin to compete, u cant compare with these
Go +All Out+ like +Pac+ did on his enemies
As if the mic was a sword, bring u swiftly to ur knees
Have you running with your mic between you're legs screaming please please
U so much of a +pussy+, it be +smelling/feeling good+ like a summer breeze
Destroy ur credibility, have niggaz hatin on u from overseas
Ill have u shaken up like a set of keys
My skills are set to increase
But urs are just wack and annoying like fleas
Ur rhymes dont climax like women that only tease
In fact they dont even elevate, merely plummet like leaves
My rap persona is more well-rounded than platinum CD's
My verses are worked out (like) strategies
Ive handled more beef than Micky D's
Ur words +roll+ off my back so much, ill +smoke+ them up like trees
My verse'll kill u worse than the anticipation of a wack underground rapper's shelved release
U done brought yourself in bigger shit than a fat man's feases
Usually I destroy in less than 15 bars, but ill make u +pay+ a lil +extra+ like +fees+
Bring u closer to God than Mother Therese
This rhyme's nearly done but dont be at ease
My words'll hunt you for centuries
You've just been murdered, now rest in peace
 
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itz coo chronic. you need to get at me dogg, so we can see whatz crackin wit the regime site: thugged out. get at me fokez. sign on AIM, or e-mail me. peace........yung-g