lil flow..give feedback

[sfgiants]

just startin...let me knwo what i gotta do to do better

i rock san fransisco giants hats tilted to the side
glock in tha pants feel me 's how i ride
got the bonds jersey you kno #25
fuckin with me just flat-out-wont-fly
buckin with me will have-your-soul-rise
before you know it theres a bullet right between your eyes
its not my fault you got no cock between your thighs

 

[sfgiants]

ok...like....??? and what is hats in green letters mean

 

[TROLL]

I think it needs work.

I second that...

If your just starting out then your well on your way because i can remember my first few spits werent half as good...my only suggestions would be..

to stay away from monotony. dont spit rhymes that are really easy to produce like...

im a muffuccin killa and your running outta time-
u wanna fuck with me and imma pull out my 9-

those are real basic.... u want to spit something that people will think about and understand at the same time. so far so good folx, practice will make perfect.

 

[Jabbz]

you idiot when you quoted him you left a link, thats why its green. and btw you shouldnt be givin people advice or your opinion for that matter cuz you are whack as fuck yourself boy.

 

[FATAL NYGHTMARE]

He already battled you, and beat you.

 

[sfgiants]

haha...well anyways what the fuck can you tell me bout my shit someone?