Just a Freestyle

[*Thug-C*]

Bitch's say I wont make in this game/
Caus there shit is fuckin lame/
and my shit ant the same/
who wants to look in my eyes/
no need to compromize/
caus all you tell is liez/
motha fuckaz like u i just dispize/
so i have not cure to my siccness/
Who wanna test my quickness/
when I come im sure to bring heat/
keep talkin that shit ya ass going to get beat/
Im stoppen like a pancake/
your the wrong person sorry for my mistake/
dam I cant complete my mission/
I made the wrong disecion/

LOLOL hahaha that shit is wack

 

[tank locc]

u need a more definitive vocab

 

[-TiM C-]

yea, that was wack.

 

[Juan Million]

...and when is your album coming out?

 

[-TiM C-]

lmao

 

[Miz X RaiDeD]

youre tryin to hard to rhyme and your bars are too short

 

[-TiM C-]

^that, and you are using vocab that reflects on your age. im young too dawg, but try to use more complex rhyme schemes and words..

if you are really making a CD, it isnt all about lyrics, but delivery also.. still, lyrics like that wont cut it for the whole LP.

 

[Quick]

more complex rhyme schemes and words

Exactly.

 

[*Thug-C*]

Nah that was just playin around

 

[-TiM C-]

how bout you flow something real?

 

[*Thug-C*]

OK

 

[TRAGIC LOSSES]

KINDA WEAK.....I PEEPED YOUR MP3 THE OTHER DAY AND I MUST SAY IT'S OK....YOU NEED TO WORK ON YOUR VOICE IN A MAJOR WAY.....YOU SOUND TOO KIDDIE......AND YES,I KNOW YOU'RE YOUNG.....

 

[*Thug-C*]

The new verse is in the other post

 

[DeadBodyBaker]

Enter the realm of the dark and departed
Where evil ends up at the same place it started
Priests of the black robe own all you see
I know other place than hell this could be
Souls flow like a river all threw its red core
Still not knowing why or even what for
Headless children only know all this story
It all ends the same with the picture all gory
So its up to you all to make your decision
But I'll tell you right now there is no subsision...