i wrote this today...

[TONY206]

im loaded right now. this is like the 1st shit i ever wrote. ill fix whatever error tomorrow cuzz im loaded now.


call me seattle cuzz im reigning like no other/ ill never come (cum) weak bitch ask your mother/ you were a waste of sperm son I should have busted on her chest/ like im busting on urs, lyrics like bullets penetrating the vest/ entered your skin like im entering a contest/ but you couldn’t win this contest even if ur name was victor/ im making you tremble cuzz im off the richter/ with my rhymes dropping like rain/ im stopping your flow like blood clots in veins/ my verses are like tysons hands labeled a deadly weapon/ yours are like bob hopes theyre old and decrepit/ your day job, you shoulda kept it/ cuzz you cant excel in the rap game even if I “left” it/ you continue to spit weakly like you have no saliva/ and you think you tight like a virgins vagina/ ill make you swallow your pride like I made your mom swallow mine/ you cant even concentrate cuzz of all of these quotables I left in your mind/ like a coke fiends dream im leavin your brain filled with “dope lines”/

 

[Da Mack]

To be honest that was fucking weak. Pre-school shit.

 

[TONY206]

u gotta admit that some of it was tight, it was the 1st shit i ever wrote. what about the last line?

 

[x-kalibur]

lol good shit tony...for you're first try that's better then half the shit thats on these boards...last line was cold too...

 

[Da Mack]

Didn't see that.

For your first time it was a good effort, but you still have a very steep path to climb.

 

[TONY206]

yah im not tryin tryin to get anywhere, i was just bored and wrote that. i think there are some good punches in there but as a whole it didnt flow well. i just thought that those punches were good enuff to put on here.

 

[Da Mack]

Taking tips from Tadou will get your rap career nowhere people. Don't listen to this faggot.

 

[Greg Double]

TONY206>> its aight man, i can see you know what you tryin 2 do with it, weak yes, but understood its a debut flow. real decent considering homie. write another one

 

[TONY206]

write another one

that was prolly the best id ever do lol


@tadou, i just thought some of the punches were worth showing on here. i know it wasnt a properly structured rhyme. and i dont EVER plan to do any of those for the fact that i suck. lol

 

[Greg Double]

how much you charge for logos and shit man?

 

[TONY206]

i dont have a set price as of yet. ill prolly lace ya for $40 right now.

 

[Greg Double]

aight, thats too deep into my pockets for a useless ass logo right neow, but ill get at you