FIST TIME WRITIN'

[Big Teflon]

ONE DAY I WAS CHILLIN WIT MY BOYZ AND THEY WAS WRITIN AND THEY TOLD ME TO GIVE IT A SHOT....SO I DID AND THIS IS WHAT CAME OUT.....TELL ME IF YA LIKE....

MURDER/ALWAYZ GOIN THRU MY HED/
NOW IT'Z TIME TO FILL THIS NIGGA FULL OF LED/
SEE THE BULLET PEIRCE HIS SKIN/
NOW HE'Z BLEEDIN FRUM WITHIN/
I'VE COMMITED 1 OF THE DEDLY 7 SINZ/
NIGGA/THIZ BIG TEFLON/
SPIT ONE/THEN I'M GONE/
FOR EVERY NIGGA THAT I SNIPE/
IT'LL BE ANUTHA STRIPE/
ANUTHA OUTLINE OF CHALK/
SEE YOU COULD TALK THE TALK/
BUT I CAN WALK THE WALK/
NOW WHAT YOU GUNNA DO/
ALWAYZ GOT A GAT WITH THE HANDLE PULLED BACK/
THAT IS WHAT YOU LACK/
WHEN YOU TRY TO CATCH ME SLIPPIN/
YOU KNOW A STEEL IS WHAT I'LL BE GRIPPIN/

I NEVER FINISHED IT BUT THAT IS WHAT I HAVE SO FAR

 

[-TiM C-]

i'm gonna tell you like i tell every1 else who posts that (basically) indentical flow..

expand it bro. get more complex vocab and rhyme schemes..

instead of like:

i fill him wit lead/
put shots in his head/

say something like:

sendin-slugs-to-his-head..
lettin em live? naw, in endin-thugs-instead..

see how all those last words rhyme? to me it shows more thought and skill.. but work on it.. your first flow.. i know exactly how it goes man.

 

[Big Teflon]

THANKS FOR THE INPUT HOMIE.....I'LL RE WERK IT AND POST IT BACK UP

 

[Lazy Loc]

yea ya shit iz too simple
mix it up a lil

 

[FATAL NYGHTMARE]

sendin-slugs-to-his-head..
lettin em live? naw, in endin-thugs-instead..

that shyt made no sence.

 

[MR. TYPCEE]

that shyt made no sence.

LOL...JUST AN EXAMPLE HOMIE...$IDEWAYZ

 

[tank locc]

these "1st" time flows allways sound the same, no vocab and no good content, its allways about killin people

 

[-TiM C-]

yea im just usin xample to show him what i mean.

 

[TRAGIC LOSSES]

I AGREE WITH TIM C.......