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All Out HOGG

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This is MY star, you'll never be able to have it...You can't even touch it, NEVER grasp it...Bring you back down to reality...Nothin even means shit to me...They say stars shine bright on lonely nights...A lil special sign inda sky that assures everything'll be alright...Its cold BITCH WAKE UP...This is MY cold BITCH WAKE UP...Im so disgusted with you...& when im next to you i feel so empty too...I hope you die...I'll whisper i love you & watch you die...This is MY HATE, You'll never be able to have it...You can't even touch it, NEVER grasp it...Bring yourself so close into me...Press your chest against mine & feel our hearts beat...Just the warmth alone could bring tears to your eyes...What do you do when grey clouds clutter skys...The small slivers of pain that make first loves break apart...Just holding that special place thas reserved for you called my heart...Its so cold & lonely on ya own...Its so hard when ya without feelings all alone...This is MY time to shine like the angels who lost they wings...This is MY time to sing like the harp with broken strings...I'll take it all in stride with the evil in your eyes...I know you can't wait to shatter promises & reveal lies...But im here for you becuase i love you...Bring yourself closer to me so i can kiss, hold, & hug you...This is MY moon, You'll never be able to have it...You can't even touch it, NEVER grasp it...And when i fall off it i hope i die...Just the whispers inda wind -You was mine...
 
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WcMalice

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shits deep.......only thing I dont understand so much is how you meant for the flow of it to be, your rhymes match up nicely, I would just have to hear you spit it to get how it's supposed to sound cuz it dont sound right how I read it.
 
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All Out HOGG

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Yea...Its not the norm...Its this lil experiment that im putting hella time into...Kinda think like the change in nas's one mic song...It starts off slow paced & gradualy picks up pace then just stops & goes back to slow & builds up again...& the last 2 lines are done with strained vocals...its hard to explain but it sounds lovely accapella...im waiting for the right beat...to record it...
 
KODOGG

KODOGG

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Wow....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................... Shit's REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLY Deep..

They say stars shine bright on lonely nights...A lil special sign inda sky that assures everything'll be alright

^^ That Line Sticks out to me.. a very ill one..

This song's out cold.. As usual SmuRf.
 
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FaT j

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damn foo that wuz the shit i think i gonna tell shifty to peep dis and then maybe he'll shut up! cuz i kno he can't beat that
 
FATAL NYGHTMARE

FATAL NYGHTMARE

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u guyz are fuckin sad. i mean, really.

that sounded like a fuckin poem. before u go and say poemz and flowz are tha same, STOP, cuz i dont wanna hear it. this iz unrestricted nut riding in full effect.

Smurf, you do come deep. deep iz koo, but itz not tight. there'z a difference between deep and tight. im not gonna say this piece of work is a piece of shit, bcuz it's not, im sure you put a lot of work into it, but it doeznt deserve tha praize it getz. you sound like a corny ass B2K rapper with that shit. but if thatz your style koo, but im gonna give you real feedback, instead of punk pussy nut fondling praizes. i realize we arent friendz at all and you dont give a fuck wut i think, but sumthing had to be said. with tha exeption of WCMalice and maybe Tim, you've astounded two kidz and got ball licking repliez. for sum reazon whenever sumbody else comez with deep shit with Dr. Seuss rhymez, they get told they need to work on their rhymez. but when you do tha same shit, nobody sayz shit, all they do iz say "that's some next level shit."

juzt callin em like i see em.
 
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Shifty

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Re: fatj

BITCH who the fuck are you to tell me to shut up?
if you wanna go ill take you too, you better watch what you say you little faggot. I heard your weak ass flow on KODOGGZ audio, you rappin with 5 year olds and shit, Diarhea sounds less shitty than you. So what the fuck you want some to you no talent bitch.
 
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All Out HOGG

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FaTaL NyGhTmArE said:


Smurf, you do come deep. deep iz koo, but itz not tight. there'z a difference between deep and tight. im not gonna say this piece of work is a piece of shit, bcuz it's not, im sure you put a lot of work into it, but it doeznt deserve tha praize it getz. juzt callin em like i see em.
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^^^Its actualy feedback like this i pay most attention too...When i make someone i know don't like me say my shit aint wack...must mean im doing sumthin right
 
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BaYzHe||!PoW!||

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This is MY time to sing like the harp with broken strings...



yo... i feel you man... shit was dope...




ha... even G's love someone, too, huh?




lol




naa man... for real... this shit was hot... im not gonna say it was deep, cuz deep is a word used too often to express the material in someones work...




shit isn't supposed to be deep... shit is supposed to invoke emotions... ones you can relate to...




if all we wrote for was to be deep... then is that not a false inspiration? much like studio thugs?





shit is real tho... keep it up man, dope drop...




peace
 
KODOGG

KODOGG

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Umm Fatal.. You jumpin on ma back like a fuccin gay rabbit.. Get off.. I said this shit was Deep I even gave a fuccin line that I liked..
So dont call me a nut ryder cuz all your doin is rydin Shifty's nutz in ma eyes.. 'n Shifty Fat J jus tryin' ta give ya tips bro.. 'n that 5 year ol' is ma friend sam he's actually 13..
 
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Chaos

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KODOGG MAYBE YOU MISSED THE FACT THAT SHIFTY IS FATALZ COUSIN, OR AT LEAST THATS WHAT I THOUGHT I READ...






YOUR FRIEND HAPPENS TO BE A BITCH THOUGH...HE CAN'T SPIT SO HE HAS NO ROOM TO GIVE TIPS...













 
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FaT j

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fuck this i told all u that i ain't good at spittin so y the fuck u sayin all that shit i admitted it b 4. but i learned from wut every 1 else critisized me wit wut 2 do and wut not shit all i doin iz tryin to give shifty tips on shit!i don't kno wtf everyones problem iz.i've had problems wit chaos in the past and thats how i found out people on here r real!and i would bak anyone on this board up if they needed it no matter wut so every 1 jus stop trippin

@kodogg
iz chaos trezdon s.?
 
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Chaos

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Yeah, I'm Trezdon.. BUT you guys are missing the point, why would someone take tips or take kindly to tips from people who can't spit themselves...



I'm not hatin' on either of you I'm trying to point some shit out to you guys...




KODOGG, Fatal is just someone you don't wanna fuck with... and I was lettin you know w/o really lettin you know by telling you why he was helpin out his cuzzo or whatever he is to him ...





FAT J... you do ride alot of dick round here, and I was just pointing that out to you... you don't got to take shit so personal, it's kind of obvious and annoying the way your ridin' everyone round here..

 
FATAL NYGHTMARE

FATAL NYGHTMARE

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KODOGG said:
Umm Fatal.. You jumpin on ma back like a fuccin gay rabbit.. Get off..
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i tried not to be fucked up, but now you fucked it up so fuck it. YOU SUCK ballz, and you couldnt tell a good flow from a weak one if your life depended on it. you'd be dead in a fuckin gutter already.
So dont call me a nut ryder cuz all your doin is rydin Shifty's nutz in ma eyes..
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take a long hard look at everything you've posted. not one wuz heat. then go back and listen to your audio, not one wuz heat. i know heat from weakness.... you obviously dont. Shifty can work on his shit, and he will, BUT he'z already better than you and your homeboy FaT j. i call em like i see em with an educated analysis. you know nothing and it's obvious. Smurf's shit didnt suck ass, BUT it didnt deserve an astounded child's reply. "shits rrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaallly deep" wut tha fuck????
 
FATAL NYGHTMARE

FATAL NYGHTMARE

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FINALLY SUMONE WHO KNOWZ WUT THEY'RE TALKING ABOUT:

Chaos said:
KODOGG, Fatal is just someone you don't wanna fuck with... and I was lettin you know w/o really lettin you know by telling you why he was helpin out his cuzzo or whatever he is to him ...
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114% true. i wuznt really "helpin" my cousin, all i did wuz state tha obvious. and at first i TRIED to explain to both of them wut wuz up without being fucked up towardz them. but they both ruined it and now they can both lick my nutz.

FAT J... you do ride alot of dick round here, and I was just pointing that out to you... you don't got to take shit so personal, it's kind of obvious and annoying the way your ridin' everyone round here..
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i tried to do that but he doeznt listen to me. tha childish ignorance overcomez wutever intelligence he may have had at one time.
 
KODOGG

KODOGG

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Fatal.. Heh.. This fighting is gay

a) Cuz you'r lyricaly better then me
b) Cuz I aint want beef wit ALL of KK (Basicly the WHOLE flowz board)
c) Cuz I aint wantin beef wit NOONE on the flowz board..

So I hope after you guyz woop me + fat j's ass in that battle you'll be satisfied.
 
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