nice flow
my main criticism really concerns the the topic of discussion.
to give an example of this, i was watching MTV Made the other day, and this one dwarf dude wanted to be made into a rapper. The kid was still in highschool, really being brought up fairly broke, he had a tendency to be shy n all that.
Then he meets his coach and is told to write raps to perform them. This dude's raps are all like "i get women, i get money" all the shit he really doesnt get , about a life he really does not live. And i was actually pretty shocked to see that this 'professional' dude did not stop him right there n then like 'yo hold it. where the women n money at? why dont u rap about things u actually deal with?'
Now im not saying you dont get or live the things your verse was about, but out of respect to you for simply being a Man, i am very certain that drinks n buyin the bar n shit are really not the prime of your life.
It is still a very nice flow and i can see the talent and the hard work behind it all, i just wish that as musicians and as humans as a whole, we start representing things that are actually important to us, sharing struggles that we are actually facing, and really being a tool for the enlightenment of each other as a whole.
tl;dr : great talent and flow, wish it would all go towards an expression of the deeper sides of one's experiences in life.
