Big Paqo

[x-kalibur]

Big Paco be sittin behind his computer screen flowin from a macintosh-
nigga eat so much clit he thought a doosh was a mouth wash-
call you self a thug when you sportin osh kosh-
straight school girl words *gee golly gosh*-
his words are big but his ego is microscopic-
when I talk about a battle this nigga feel the need to change the topic-
Im the one man army tearin apart your tank and your base-
and if all else fales. I know your gona come out your purse with mase-
mother fucka Im not lookin for recognision-
Ill be the one they interogatin when your body is missin-
this shits nothing personal its strictly bisness-
work on your flows. I think they have a program at 24 hour fitness-
my words corupt your mind putin knoches in brain cells-
Im sick of you postin your flows when the just wak tales-
Im up on the internet checkin my hot mail, you on the computer lookin for hot males-
*haha* yea now you can under stand it-
Im spotin your ass like cyclops the one eyed bandit-



can I get some feedback every one?

 

[Slappin Beatz]

shits coo

 

[x-kalibur]

any one else feelin this shit or is it a killed thread?

 

[Stealth]

I think you need to tighten up your lines...your rhyme scheme is gettin there, and u got punches. just make it so that it can be read as a rhyme. Its pretty good.

 

[Asthmatic]

Im feelin my nigga

 

[Asthmatic]

You beefin wit Big Paq? I aint got shit against him but if ur on it and get burnt im at yo side fasho. Peace.

 

[N*Sane]

good shit x- keep postin

 

[Big Paqo]

me and X-kalibur got friendly competition goin.

with me and eastwood its more of a personal thang.

 

[x-kalibur]

^^exactly nothin personal.

 

[Big Paqo]

see. X-calibur can take friendly competition and not turn it personal. thats what makes a good artist really.

some constructive criticism. like stealth said. tighten up your lines cuz they have some loose words that you can cut. with me i always got a beat in my head and if a line is too long cuz of excess words i chop it enough to still make the point i was aiming for but enough so its shortened and is on track with the beat in my head.

good shit.

 

[x-kalibur]

Ill will do that. Good shit Paqo. stay up -out