I won't do like you, and call you a faggot and leave it at that.....but this is a good track.
Lyrically.....it could use a little work, but just a little (delivery-wise, I'm talking here). A few syllables off altogether, and other things that sound too rushed or too stretched. --- Production wise, thats not my thing, so I won't even try.
Writing-wise, I would watch the syllables though, because they are borderline corny-sounding. The key is to stress them, but not OVER-stress them (especially the first word in the string), or you'll end up sounding like a young Fabolous, like you're trying way too hard to say "Look at me! I'm rhyming with Multis!", instead of just letting it all flow and make sense.
I'll be keeping an eye out for new shit. And I will try to post up some new material of my own, so i don't just sound like some monday-morning quarterback that is afraid of getting his own criticisms.
