2 verses, let me get some FEEDBACK!!!! good or bad

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Jul 21, 2002
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here are 2 verses, they aren't part of the same song. the first verse was supposed to go on a song with BIG OSO LOC when i was in cali, but shit fell thru....... second on is just some shit i'm fuckin around with...not done yet. Let me know, good or bad input or even suggestions. thanks

I WENT FROM HATIN LIFE
TO CELEBRATIN LIFE
ALL THE WHILE ACCELERATIN MY-
PENETENTIARY CHANCES JUST TO GET A GLANCE
AT BETTER FINANCES
THEY GON' MULTIPLY MY ENHANCEMENTS
FOR RIDINWITH BIG OSO AND THEY KNOW WHAT MY STANCE IS
AND THAT'S ENOUGH TO CHANGE THE HEARTBEAT OF THE INDUSTRY
ALTHOUGH IT AIN'T TOP 40 THAT EVEN INTERESTS ME
DON'T POSITION ME,
NEXT TO POP STARS WITH SOFTER HEARTS THAN SOME FUCKIN POP TARTS
CAUSE YOU KNOW I'M REAL WHEN THE SONG STARTS
N WHEN I RELEASE THE HEAT-
I'LL OBLITERATE YOU PHONIES
I'LL DISINIGRATE YOUR HOMIES
AND I'LL INCINERATE YA WHOLE STREET
IT'S A NORTH THING
AND I WAS BORN AND BRED TO WANNA SEE MY RIVALS DEAD
BEEN SPORTIN RED SINCE THE AGE OF 10
CAUSE HOMIES PUT ME ON GAME WAY BACK THEN
BUT 9 YEARS LATER GOD CHANGED THE HEART OF THIS YOUNG HUERO
SHOULD I PUT DOWN THE FILERO THAT I'VE CARRIED SINCE I WAS LITTLE?
A WATSONERO WOULDN'T DO IT BUT GOD WANTS ME TO CHANGE
WITH ALL THESE FUCKERS TRYNA KILL ME....DAMN I'M CAUGHT UP IN THE MIDDLE////


SECOND VERSE.....DIFFERENT SONG......

I feel like the worlds at war, and like I’m forced to pour, 4 quarts of chlorine in my mouth and come clean for you whores// of course my corneas are sore, and my soul is torn, like it’s split in 4 quarters, reaching all 4 corners// of the world like a reporter, for the national geographic explorer, but I’m more known than Tommy Lasorda, In northern California// in proportion to my support, I’m sort of like a light skinned Micheal Jordan, I’m the king of this court// I’m holding my fort, I’m scorching mics down to the cord, I ain’t a thief in Florida, So I ain’t takin no shorts// and some still don’t understand the importance, that Chris for instance doesn’t trust possible informants, but I got my chevy steady screamin high performance, if you ain’t ready then should hide before I floor it// I’ll cut ya fat and bring heat to ya grill like george foreman, you know the drill, man I’m keeping it real like E-40//


Let me know...
 
May 12, 2002
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tadou said:
You should be able to switch up your flow like a record, making it 10% faster or 10% slower, and not missing a beat (no pun intended)...


^^That actually is good advice there though for anyone, I never worried bout that shit back in the days. but now I make sure all my shit in interchangable and I can bust shit out to any ridiculous number of beats. Lets you find the right mood of beat to match your lyrics every time.