1 Verse wit Chorus, any kind of feedback appreciated

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#1
Verse:

Let ya mind relax sit back and listen to what im sayin/
Lay down ya straps perhaps its ya own fate that ya takin/
And aint nobody gonna be prayin or givin a fuck when ya gone/
Most people get stuck in tryin to figure out whats right and whats wrong/
Muthafuckas walkin around oblivious not knowin whats goin on/
But you gotta keep in mind that you just might not wake up tomorrow/
And you'll realize nobodies eyes are cryin tears of sorrow/
But you couldnt break tha ties and you went just like tha rest of them/
Ya body lies dead and ya souls...trapped within/
Ya blood wuz on tha mans hands and nobody questioned him/
And when tha police came to report nobody mentioned him/
He came, took ya life and left you bleedin in tha rain/
But thats how life goes when you live... in tha game/
So in tha name of tha lord reach for tha sky and pray he'll open up tha doors for ya/
And dont look back, cuz nobody will mourn for ya

Chorus:
I feel much hatred against me as we embark on tha days of tha dark/
My sould searches for tha light but cant find even tha slightest spark/
Im feelin tha pressure of bein trapped in a world full of hate/
I pray for forgiveness of my sins but by now its just too late
 
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#4
yeah, i wrote it when i wuz 15 so it aint tha best. i appreciate tha feedback though. stay up