Somebody Needs to Take Control (PEEP THIS)

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Jul 21, 2005
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horrific scenes of bastards killing each other
as a church is telling its black pastor thrilling speech brother
five models with eating disorders on a run way
while a weather man boldly predicts, all of it’s over on sunday
a sad hungry girl simply begs for a little food
and gets killed while she screams, give me some skittles dude
a group of perverts take her corpse into a car
two police officers quickly catch one, and force him to a bar
they were gay as fuck and raped the kid badly
someone suddenly walked in, that just ain’t gave a shit sadly
a bum gets stomped on by a few thugs
then they cold heartily stabbed him, all for just the dudes drugs
some guy comes and tries to help the man out
the thugs decided not to hold back, it turned to a damn bout
bullets flying left and right through legs and shit
this is when dude ran out of slugs, for his life he begs the kids
I didn’t like what I saw so I turned to elsewhere
an ugly bitch pops up talking about I use to own a house here
she starts having sex with the first idiot she notices
he writes a confession to her, but he forgets where the notice is
he wanted to let her know that he gave her aids
and he’d always be a part of her, the goodbye waves were fake
but that’s enough of all the things I’m seeing
that happen to be sick enough to make you think I’m dreaming
I’m wide awake and these images aren’t fake
I shouldn’t even be seeing these awful things at this current age
but you won’t be surprised if you’d fucking see me
I’m just some five year old kid, flipping channels and watching tv
 

Stealth

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Good content. 2 syllable multis at each line. I wasn't FEELING the rhyme flow (i'm listening to Steve Miller Band so its probably not matching up to the beat, lmao) but I liked what u had to say.

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Jul 7, 2005
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yeah, lyrics were really good man... you got talent... flow was a little rough at points, cuz your second lines seemed to always have more syllables than your first... but forreal, this was a tight verse...