Deep Shit

[VeeGee]

i always write articles at www.buchosbar.com and i dont in any way consider myself a good writer, but this one i like... it will touch you... here is a snipit

“It’s a beautiful bright spring day and a new baby boy is brought into this world...Dad drank all day only taking breaks to smoke... Isolated in a one-room apartment next to others the same, too dirty to live in, sat this boy who never knew his proper name... Aloud ‘bang’ he heard, so up he stood. By the counter laid the owner a nice old man, from whose head a warm river of red ran...”

please go to www.buchosbar.com if you want to read the rest - please let me know what you think

 

[Deep Thought]

Fucking applause dude, fucking applause.

Forced in places but, the overall quality of the piece easily outshines the small blemishes. Again, outstanding work bruh.

Don't sleep folks. This is fully worth the 5 minutes of your time.

 

[VeeGee]

Fucking applause dude, fucking applause.

Forced in places but, the overall quality of the piece easily outshines the small blemishes. Again, outstanding work bruh.

Don't sleep folks. This is fully worth the 5 minutes of your time.

thanks, any and all feedback is apreciated... as well as help with proofing it

 

[JIM HAT]

thats really nice, great job

 

[Stealth]

I liked that a lot. Very good story.

 

[Cameron]

Wow, good stuff man. You write pretty well.

 

[brownskin]

very well done !!!!! I love how you told the story in parital verse it was interesting to read. I am sad about the little boy though
*tear*

 

[VeeGee]

Re: EXCELLENT!

GOOD GOOD SHIT VEEGEE!!

I LIKED THAT....THE STORY OF CLARK KENT?

SS

naw not about clark kent, but some down and out kid with a huge heart wantin to be a hero like clark kent

 

[VeeGee]

Re: Re: Re: EXCELLENT!

AH!...I SEE!!!


EITHER WAY- REGARDLESS....EXCELLENT WRITINGS.

SS

thanks man