I wrote this when me and the girl were fighting. Any criticism will be helpful

It all started talkin online one day
when you saw me your eyes lit up like a sunray
We loved every minute and we had some fun play
never saw an end in sight, the done day
Only thought we were goin forever One way
monday thugh sunday would shoot faster than gunplay
anything we did, had the time of our life
from mini things to kids, your were mine, my new wife
Im willing to give it more than common patience
But complication after complication
waiting for compensation
You Looked past me being sick, broke, and forget the drugs and powder
We would sit, joke and make love for hours
Didnt matter the weather we were above the showers
you would come see me in a drought or the coldest night
you saw what love was about when I Hold you tight
Just tell me how to fix it, we will mold this right
can't let you go, Cannot Fold this fight
cause without you Im in darkness, Please hold this light
Your My sunshine, every beat to my heart
every breath in my body, Im weak when were apart
So what do we do, where do we start?
Cause right now
feelin low down depressed, and stressed,
obsessed, a mess but just
how can one person you thinks gonna be the final one,
My mind is done,
the shining sun,
its all blinding fun at first
but the same loves a curse
When Im with you I'm high,
im With the birds
when you feel it cant get no worse
Argue say goodbyes ,throw a fit to burst
love can't be defined wit the words
feelings make you wanna cry, drink a 5th of burb.
Relationship Want to stay Hopin' yours is blessed
Pray hopin that this may open doors to rest
make it to the next day hopin for the best
Man I hope Im ready for the test
How much can one heart take
heartache after heartache
take a hard break
and park fate
you start hate
words spew out at a dart pace
My heart race
our love blossomed fast as ever
I Know deep inside we can last forever
We got a mad vendetta
Wrote out my feelings never trash my letters
just look pass the headers
you make me feel warm like a vast of sweaters
I cant ask for better
When Im with you the world stops
It's just me and you and nothin else
You want me for me, your above the wealth
I hope you know I love you more than I love myself

thanks bro. I'm looking for any idea's on how to improve my rhyme schemes, trying to get more complex.

thanks man. This is the first chick I feel this way about..driving me pretty crazy

Shit. I wish I could do graffiti. I appreciate all the comments on it, I need to write more. Im trying to get a more complex style and get better with my multi's but always got some shit going on and never get around to it. Trying to find a way to record some stuff too. I just need some beats. I don't really want to take other beats and make a mixtape type deal.

My man Dirt E Needz....you been stalkin' me in these rap threads. lol. it's all good man, you seem like you had another spark to start rapping or writing raps again recently.